argument paper

For my argument paper I will be studying whether or not Diet Soda is good for you or not

Template B for review

There are four main criteria that I will be judging this restaurant on. The first will be the atmosphere inside Einstein Brothers Bagels. This will be a very easy subject to review and even if people say that it may be a bit crowded inside, this restaurant does what it can with the space it has been given. They even stem off a portion of the customers to the smoothie restaurant next to einsteins in order to cut the time of the line. The second criteria will be the quality of the food. The general consensus for fats food restaurants is that the quality is very sub par, but Einsteins really uses fresh products and they do not hesitate to throw away any product that doesnt seem fresh. The third criteria will be the actual taste of the food and whether people like it or not. People love the bagels and food at einsteins and there really isnt much to defend on this issue. The final criteria is the staff at einsteins. As a whole they have an incredibly friendly staff, but there are one or two bad apples. The employees clearly enjoy their job and love making the customers happy.

Template A for review

The audience for this paper would be anyone considering going to einsteins bagels located in the business administration building. This review will provide the audience with enough information so that they can decide whether they would like to eat at this restaurant or not. As a restaurant you dont really get to much of the values aspect. However, I do know they are a predominately jewish establishment and while all of the bagels are kosher the over is not so therefore the bagels cannot be considered kosher after they are cooked. They are very keen on making money any way they can and they will try and persuade you into making your meal into a bundle so they can make more money and this angers alot of people. Their friends or customers in this situation are interestly in three things. They want good tasting food, fast service, and low prices. Einsteins is fully aware of the good tasting food and the fast service, but it seems to be the price issue that they dont understand. It seems as if every month the price goes up about 10 cents in some sneaky attempt to jack up the price without the customers noticing. They are doing a great job in the first two categories but it is the price that is killing them at the moment. The employees see the real tangible benefits as making money and seeing the satisfied looks on the customers faces when the get their food. This cannot be said for all of the employees as their are exceptions, but for the most part these are the two main benifits of einsteins employees. When it comes the corporate and the big guys upstairs, it seems as if all they care about is how to make the most money. They relentlessly come out with new sanwiches with less and less ingredients for higher and higher prices and this really needs to stop. The customer base of einsteins has already been dropping and corporate is not helping this situation. As a whole einsteins as well as its employees are doing very well and will be in business for a long time.

Commentary Outline

Issue: Cops using illegal tactics to give excessive dui's on campus
Point #1: Cops need to be monitored and not allowed to pull people of for infractions that they didnt even violate
-pulling people over for illegal lane change in an effort to give dui
-hiding in bushes/trees in order to catch people making minor infraction to give them dui
-cops automatic assumption that if you are driving on campus during a certain time then you are drunk
-complete negligence for the original violation you were pulled over for if it turns out that you are sober

Point #2: Give personal and example and friends example
-friend andrew pulled over for tail light being out at 2 am on campus
-was not the case
-let go when he blew
-personal story about being pulled over
Point #3: Give resolution and how this can be fixed
-This can be fixed by ucf cracking down on cops
-needs to be a stricter policy of who should and should not be pulled over
-cops need to be taught that they are not above the law but rather enforcing it
Conclusion:
UCF is a great school and has many great aspects about it. This is just one of the downfalls that ucf has. As students we are in fear of driving on campus at night even if we are sober and this should not be the case.

Memoir Draft

There are many issues plauging the ucf campus, but there are some issues no matter how small they may seem that need to get the most attention. As UCF students we cannot ignore the fact that cops will go to any measure to hand out duis on campus. They are pulling people over at night for the most ridiculous traffice violations with one intent, to give you a dui. This si not something that I am simply taliking about because of a bad experience that I have had, but rather because it has become a much more widespread issue around campus that is affecting everyone. Students are afraid to be on campus at night and this cannot happen. People who are not the least bit intoxicated will shy away from being on campus at night just because they know they will get pulled over anway. This is a problem that needs to be addressed immediately and will only be solved through ucf seeing and addressing the problem.
The police on ucfs campus have taken their actions to more and more of an extreme as I have been going to this university. It seems as if they think that they are above the law and will go to any measure to simply get someone pulled over and have them handcuffed in the back of their care. The amount of dui's on campus hs gone up 30 percent in the past 3 years and this is not because people are drinking and driving more but because of the cops and their insane tactics of handing out dui's.

Commentary Assignment Topic Choice

The abundance of police pulling people over on campus at night just looking to give them DUI's

It has come to my attention that it this is a very widespread issue around campus and many student are being affected by this. After doing a bit of researcher and asking around I have discovered that the overwhelming majority of students at ucf are afraid to drive on campus at night, intoxicated or not. The ucf police have began to crack down on drunk drivers on campus, but it seems as if they have gone to far. They are simply pulling everyone over they see for insigificant reasons and forcing them into doing a sobriety test. My friend andrew was driving home his two friends who lived on campus the other night and was pulled over as soon as he got onto campus. Since the people he has driving smelled of alcohol he was forced to do a sobriety test and was not able to pass it even though he was completely sober. Eventually, he was given a breathalizer and it was discovered he was sober and was allowed to go. The ucf people have it out for anyone driving on campus at night and it is affecting ucf students in a very negative way. People will shy away from going on campus at night even if it is for school related work. This is not all though, people are developing a stronger and stronger anger towards the ucf police and ucf in general and this hurts the moral of the school. It is clear that these supposively "random" stops are being taken to an extreme and they need to be monitored much closer by ucf for the sake of the students.

Commentary Assignment

Three main issues

1. The lack of use of the transportation system provided(i.e the busses/shuttles)
2. The abundance of police pulling people over on campus at night just looking to give them DUI's
3. The lack of tradition in any facit of college life on campus in comparision to other universities across the nation.

Memoir Assignment Final Draft

It was a perfect winter day with the white snow glistening in the morning sun. I was thirteen and on top of the hill my family had lived on my entire life. The road down the entire hill was glazed with ice and my mother warned me,"You need to be careful in these conditions" to which I simply replied,"You know I will mom." Even though I value my mothers opinion very highly, I could not let such a perfect day go to waste. I grabbed my fathers 1970 candy apple red racing sled and began my descent down the hill to find a perfect spot to built my ramp. Within minutes I found a perfect spot that would not only let me build up enough speed, but it also had a nice flat ending where the ramp would be built. The snow was about a foot deep and I knew it was the perfect conditions to build this ramp. I began to pat down the snow and after almost an hour I had a 100 foot long three foot wide runway. I then headed to the dense deer infested woods to find logs to build my ramp. Five logs later, I had all the tools I needed and a pretty good looking ramp. I began to cover the logs with snow and when all was said and done, the ramp looked like it was straight out of a movie. I had finally done it; I had built a ramp that even I couldn't believe. It was perfectly straight and ended in a slight slope that would launch me at least five feet into the air. It was so perfect that I really did not think anything could go wrong and I was incredibly anxious to try out my work. This would seem like potentially the greatest day of my young life, but it would turn out to be an event that ended in disaster and proved to be a very important life lesson that I will take with me forever.
Having the mindset that this was such a perfect ramp, I was very excited and naturally I told my neighbors about the amazing feat I had accomplished. I could see the spark in each of their eyes when I spoke of this ramp and I knew that this was going to be a great day. They were very excited as well and headed up the hill to try of this ramp. I was the first to try it out and after launching in the air, I realized I landed a bit close to a telephone pole, but this did not bother me because my ramp had worked and I felt as if it was a great success. My neighbor then tried the ramp, she launched into the air beautifully and while landing in a burst of snow, I noticed she clipped the telephone pole with her sled. This probably should have been a sign to stop using the ramp, but I ignored these signs and it was my other neighbors turn. I figured I had survived the jump and so had my neighbor so there was no need to worry, but when my neighbors little brother tried out the ramp, it was a completely different story. He flew down the runway much faster than either me or my neighbor and as soon as he went airborne, I knew this was going to be the last jump of the day. He slammed into the telephone pole traveling at full speed and fell limply to the ground. I figured that this was it, I had killed the neighbor and not only was my ramp not going to be used again, but at the ripe age of thirteen I was going to jail. He lay there motionless for awhile, but eventually he got up and went crying back to his house. I didn't even give his parents a chance to come up and yell at me. I went straight back to my house and to my room where I figured maybe I would be safe. This was the complete opposite from what I had expected to happen. I was devastated not so much that the kid had hit the pole, but that I knew my ramp would be torn down. After this event, I was yelled at a great deal and like I had dreaded, my ramp was torn down.
While this seemed like a nonchalant and insignificant event in my life, it proved to have a great impact on how I live my life today. Before this event, I had no appreciation for the "what if" in life. I simply did whatever I wanted without ever thinking that something bad could come from what i was doing. This event really taught me that you need to "look before you leap" literally and figuratively. I like to think that because I built a ramp that led to an eight year old kid flying into a pole I am a better person today. I now put alot of things I do into perspective before I do them. When I am about to do something that seems a bit controversial I think about all the things that could happen as a result of my action and look back to that day when my perfect ramp was destroyed. It gets me through every day much smoother and really has helped me much more than I ever thought possible. While this event did not change my life in a great way, it was a little thing that made me a better person in ym adult life. It may seem a bit mean, but I am glad that this event happened and it has stayed with me for many years.
The true test of whether I had learned anything from this event really came into play abouit three weeks ago. It was a monday morning and I could not stand the idea of going to class so early in the morning. I looked back to the event in my childhood and thought of what would happen if I just skipped class for the day and slept. I weighed my options and eventually I decided that going to class would be the right choice and I headed off to campus. This would prove to be a great decision on my part because as fate would have it, I actually had a very important test that day that I had completelly forgotten about. I entered my sociology class and immediately realized it was test day and while I was not happy we had a test that I hadnt studied for, I was still happy I was at least at class.Everyone around me was silent and nervous in anticipation as I sat there just happy to be in class. I did not do well on this test, but had I decided not to go to class I would have done significantly worse. This childhood event saved a class grade for me and this is just one of the events in which my childhood memory helped me out greatly.
This insignificant event in my childhood has shown me that it really is the small things in life that make you into the person you are today. An eight year old flying off a ramp into a pole would just seem sad and mean to others, but it proved to be an event that helped shape who I am today. I am now confident in the decisions I make because I know that I have gove over all the pros and cons and that even if I make the incorrect decision I didnt just jump into it and make an unintelligent decision. I now am a much more cautious person in the decisions I make and while I dont always make the right choices, this event helped steer me toward marking the decisions I should be making. I will always look back to the day when I built that amazing ramp and feel sad and proud at the same time. Yes, I made and amazing ramp and no, it didnt really work, but it did teach me a great deal and I am very thankful for that. I can now look back at this and smile knowing that it made me a better and more mature person.

Memoir Draft

It was a perfect winter day with the white snow glistening in the morning sun. i was thirteen and on top of the hill my family had lived on my entire life. The road the entire hill was glazed with ice and my mother had warned me multiple times to be careful in these conditions, but i could not let such a perfect day go to waste. I grabbed my fathers 1970 candy apple red racing sled and began my descent down the hill to find the perfect spot to build my ramp. Within minutes I found a perfect spot. The snow was about a foot deep and i knew it was the perfect conditions for this ramp. I began to pat down the snow and after almost an hour i had a 100 foot long three foot wide runway. I then headed to the woods to find logs to build my ramp. Five logs later, I had a perfect ramp. I began to cover the logs with snow and when all was said and done, the ramp looked like it was straight out of a movie. I had finally done it; I had built a ramp that even I could not believe. It was perfectly straight and ended in a slight slope that would launch me at least five feet into the air. It was so perfect that i really did not think anything could go wrong and i was incredibly anxious to test out my work.

Having the mindset that this was such a perfect ramp I was very excited and naturally I told my neighbors about the amazing feat I had accomplished. They were very excited as well and headed up the hill to try this ramp. I was the first to try it out and after launching in the air, i realized i landed a bit close to a telephone pole, but this didnt bother me beacause my ramp had worked and i felt a if it was a great success. My neighbor then tried the ramp and it worked very well for her as well, but when her little brother tried out the ramp it was a completely different story. He flew down the runway much faster than either me or my neighbor and as soon as he went airborne, i knew this was going to be the last jump of the day. He slammed into the telephone pole travelling at full speed and fell to the ground. I figured that was it, I had killed the neighbor. He lay there motionless for awhile, buit eventually he got up and went srying baack to his house. This was the complete opposite from what i had expected would happen. I was devastated not so much that the kid had hit the pole, but thta i knew my ramp would be torn down. After this event, I was yelled at a great deal and like i had dreaded, my ramp was torn down.

While this seemed like a nonchalant and insignificant event in my life, it proved to have a great impact on how ilive my life today. Before this event, I had no appreciation for the "what if" in life. I simply did whatever i wanted without ever thinking that something bad could come from what i was doing. This event really taught me that you need to "look before you leap" literally and figuratively. I like to think that because I built a ramp that led to an eight year old kid flying into a pole I am a better person today. I now put a lot of things that I do into perspective before I do them. When I am about to do something that seems a bit controversial I think about all the things that could happen as a result of my action. While this event did not change my life in a great way, it was a little thing that made me a better person in my adult life. While it may seem a bit mean, I am glad that this event happened and it has stayed with me for many years.

The true test of if I had really learned anything from this event reallu came into play about three weeks ago. It was a monday morning and I could not stand the idea of going to class so early in the morning. I looked back to the event in my childhood and thought of what would happen if I just skipped class for the day and slept. I weighed my options and decided that going to class would be the right choice and i headed off to campus. Thsi would prove to be a great decision on my party because as fate would have it, I actually had a very important test that day that i had completely forgot about. I entered my sociology class and immediately realized it was test day and while i was not happy we had a test that I hasnt studied for, I was still happy I was at least at class. I did not do well on this test, but had I decided not to go to class I would have done significantly worse. This childhood event saved a class grade for me and this is just one of the events in which my childhood memory helped me out greatly.

This insignificant event in my childhood has shown me that it really is the small thing in life that make you into the person you are today. An eight year old flying off a ramp into a pole would just seem sad and mean to others, but it proved to be an event that helped shape who i am today. I now am a much more cautious person in the decisions I make and while I dont always make the right choices, this event helped steer me toward making the decisions I should be making. I will always look back to the day when I built that amazing ramp and feel proud and sad at the same time. Yes, I made a perfect looking ramp and no, it didnt really work, but it did teach me a great deal and I am very thankful for that. I can now look back at this and smile knowing that it made me a better person .

Memo Assignment

I will use the peer review as basically a way to critique myself. The message that i am attempting to convey is one that shows that i learned from this seemingly insignificant event. I feel that the peer review is something that will be somewhat constructive, but many people may not see how this could affect someone as much as it has affected me. With this criticism it will be easy for me not only to finish this memoir with strong visuals, but also it will help me to convey just how much i have gain from this event in my childhood. The whole point of this memoir was to show that I learned to think before i just jump into something and take action, and with the critique I can see how to improve on my idea.
In the past when i have had critiques of my work and by applying one persons viewpoint of my work and then incorporating my own ideas, I have been able to make papers that flow extremely well and convey my point even better. In this specific instance this is much more difficult because what I am writing about is a personal event that has personal meaning to me. Having said this, it is much more difficult for me change my personal events and how i portray them based on another persons opinion of my paper. I will attempt to portray my point the best way i can and i know that this will only help my paper and even if the person completely misses the point of my story completely it will still help me in writing my paper because i will then know i need to make my memoir much more descriptive. I am excited for this peer review and know that this will help my grade and memoir immensely.

Intro paragraph to Memoir/Brainstorming Process

It was a perfect winter day with the white snow glistening in the morning sun. I was thirteen and on top of the hill my family had lived on my entire life. The road down the entire hill was glazed with ice and my mother had warned me multiple times to be careful in these conditions, but i could not let such a perfect day go to waste. I grabbed my fathers 1970 candy apple red racing sled and began my descent down the hill to find a perfect spot to build my ramp. Within minutes i found a perfect spot. The snow was about a foot deep and i knew it was the perfect conditions for this ramp. I began to pat down then snow and after almost and hour i had a 100 foot long three foot wide runway. I then headed to the woods to find logs to build my ramp. Five logs later, I had a perfect ramp. I began to cover the logs with snow and when all was said and done, the ramp looked like it was straight out of a movie. I had finally done it, I had built a ramp that i couldn't even believe. It was perfectly straight and end in a slight slope that would launch me at least five feet into the air. It was so perfect that i really did not think anything could go wrong and i was incredibly anxious to test out my work.

Brainstorming
1. Draw pictures of my old hill, house, the ramp
2. Looked up pictures of the sled i used
3. Called my neighbor
4. chronologically wrote down event and how it happened

Memoir Assignment

3 memoir ideas:
#1When i fell off of my bike into a rose bush
#2When i set up a sled ramp directly in front of a telephone post
#3When i took part in a corn husk fight with my neighbor

Question #3
Idea #1: This memoir will be about when i took a corner too fast on my bike and fell off the bike into a rose bush. This idea will focus on the necessity to not get too ambitious and feel as if you can do anything. This idea is a result of attempting to do something that i clearly could not do and i payed for it. You have to take life slow and not get caught up in the fast paced society.
Idea #2: This memoir will be about the time when i set a ramp for my neighbors and i and i did not see or notice that it was directly in front of a telephone pole. This proved to be a very big problem because when we went over the ramp we hit the telephone pole. This memoir will focus on the necessity to "look before you leap" and plan ahead and find out whether or not what you are going to do is going to end poorly or if it is a smart decision.
Idea #3: This memoir is about when i had the brilliant idea of having a corn husk fight with my neighbor. At the time it seemed like a great idea but it turned out very bad and i ended up hurting my neighbor. This memoir will focus on the concept that everything is great until someone gets hurt. It has been an important life lesson and stays with me even in my adult life.

Question #4
Idea #1: This idea is very significant because it has stayed with me for my entire life and is an important lesson i have learned. It has taught me not to take life in such a fast paced manor and to essentially examine what i am doing before i jump or in this case crash right into it.
Idea #2: This idea was significant because it was something that was so avoidable and extremely unintelligent however, it still taught me a valuable lesson. This somewhat goes along with my first idea in that you need to look ahead(literally) before you do anything in life. While it may be fun to simply jump into something without prior planning, it really is not the best way to live your life. For every action you take there are consequences and rewards and you really need to weigh all these before you decide to go through with your plan.
Idea #3: My final idea has been something that has stayed with me for awhile and this is mainly because i felt very guilty about it. I learned that its all fun and games until someone gets hurt and this taught me the necessity for maturity. I needed to realize that there is a time and place for everything and this has helped me greatly and my adult life thus far.